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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.



@毕猪的小宝贝

Nowadays, some may hold the opinion that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. But to be frank, I cannot agree with them.
It’s true that honesty is one of the most valuable personalities of human. People often regard those who tell lies associated with something bad and consider those people as being dishonest and persons who cannot be trusted.
But not all lies are out of indecent motives and not all liars are bad people. On certain occasions, to accomplish some positive good or at least avoid evil, people have to tell lies with good intention, that is, white lies.
For instance, when I was a child, my family was not so affluence that we could only eat fish on peculiar festivals. My mom always let me eat the flesh of fish while she ate the fish-head. Once I asked her why she never ate the flesh of fish, she told me that she didn’t like it. When I grow up I found out that she lied to me about her dislike of the flesh of fish with a good intention to ensure that I could absorb enough nutrients.
As far as I’m concerned, a white lie shows that we care about others and makes our kindness more acceptable. It can also give one comfort and encouragement.
Now I’m away from home and my parents always worry about me. As long as I have something wrong, they’ll become very anxious. Though I do have troubles sometimes, I usually tell them everything is fine and don’t worry about me.
In a word, always telling the truth is not the most important consideration in any relationship between people. White lie plays a constructive role in establishing, maintaining and promoting interpersonal relations.

点评:
1.整体思路比较清晰。
2.无明显语法错误。
3.有几处小的词性和用词上的错误。

@ 漫漫

I agree that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship. Honesty is always the vital character we used to judge if one person is believable or not. In our daily life, we should first choose to tell the truth to other people.If the situation is not allowed us to tell the truth, we can choose to be silence. Furthermore, just like the patient who had cancer, he still has the right to know the real condition of his health. Though you don’t tell the patient at first, he may know the truth one day. After giving a great hope, and than seize it, which will make a greater hurt to the patient. So, we should choose to tell the truth first in the situation to reduce the harm.
In conclusion I think that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.

点评:
1.准确地表达了自己的观点。
2.注意词性的准确适用,有拼写错误。


@
程婷

As for me, I disagree with the statement that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. Firstly, it is obvious that sometimes telling a truth cannot benefit us. For instance, imaging my boss has a mistake and no one tell him, at this time, if only I point out his mistake, then I will probably out of work or decrease the appreciation in the boss’s mind. This case indicates that always telling a truth may not bring us the expected result, this is called “kind lie”. In some occasion, don’t tell a truth can help us and benefit our career. Moreover, besides the working place need kind lie, other relationship also need it, such as the tradition that we only tell parents and relatives about our good news, the reason we conceal the truth is that we don’t want to make them worry about ourselves. In my opinion, if the truth cannot make a positive role in our life, it is not necessary to reveal it in any relationship between.

点评:
1. 准确地表达了自己的观点。
2. 有语法错误,尤其是谓语和非谓语。
3. 注意用英文的思维来写句子。

@刘刘霄

We all may have the experience that we need to choose whether to tell the truth or just telling a part of the fact ,many people believed that this depends on the situation or the relationship between two people .I hold the same opinion that whether telling the truth is beneficial depends on different factors .There are the following statements to support my opinion .
On the one hand ,when one get along with others as his vacation identification ,telling the truth is truly the most critical consideration .when it comes to the business area , the relationship between two people may connect to their salaries or their company
’s profit. Everyone should hold the principle of fair and truth. For instance ,tell the patients their physical condition in details is the basic responsibility for a doctor .Hence, the doctor can indicate the patients how to cure the disease and what is the next step for them. Conceal the facts may take sorrow to the patients and break the laws.
Also ,when business man have financial conference ,his illustration should be closely related to the facts. Otherwise they may be accused of defraud. Therefore, telling the truth is the basic rule in business .
On the second hand ,
even though telling the truth is important,always telling the truth is sometimes unnecessary in a relationship.A common example would be a student who is not very talented at math will not find his or her relationship with a friend unreliable if his or her friend encourages or even lies to make him or her feel better after a math test.
So we can have the conclusion that telling a truth should depend on the situation,the word
“always” may be inaccurate

点评:
1.整体思路比较清晰。
2.有语法错误,尤其是非谓语动词的用法。
3.要注意标点符号的规范使用。两个独立的句子要使用连接词。

@ZhangWQ

There is an opinion that sometimes we should tell lies which is kind. Maybe you just think it is the best way to protect families and friends, but in my opinion everyone has his or her own idea and they can consider independently they need to know the truth. So, I think always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.
Many people
live alone who is a little far from family will always like to only tell the good news but the bad ones will be sealed. Families will think you always have a nice day, they won’t worry about you. But have you ever consider if you have something don’t good and the families are the last one to know your situation, what will they think, how can day believe your every: I’m fine. They would always worry about you even come to see you. So I think the people worry about you have the authority to know what they want to know, and they will get your situation, they can be relax after hearing your good.
There is a story called the wolves are coming. A boy
who look after the sheep alone shout the wolves are coming to the villagers just because his boring. But after to be cheated for third times, when the wolves are really coming, the villagers will never to see the boy, then the sheep are eaten by the wolves. The story tell us to be honest all the time, and we will always be believed by others.
Honest
is more important in the relationship between friends and co-operation. I think to be on time is a presentation to be honest. You can do what you have said or answered. It is proved that you have think high of what you have said. Only in this way, other people can hear what you say and take it into consideration. And then you will do something together. Actually you also will choose the honest people to have a co-operation.
So, it is very important in every relationship between people. Whatever the people are you families, friends or co-operator. We
should always telling the truth.

点评:
1.整体思路比较清晰。
2.句子之间缺少适当的连接词。
语法错误比较严重。有很多词性、句式和单复数的错误。

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